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Thursday, October 6, 2011

Untitled 1 - note my first critique!

remember, the italics are the teachers notes

13/11/85

Title

It was a Thursday night, it was Very dark on The Moors. I could here the squelching of moss and owls Hooting when I heard a snaping I looked round and saw a dark figure with a sword. I grabed my sword and stood watching, waiting knowing that soon I might die. I brought my sword out of its sheath. The figure grew closer I looked round there was know where to hide or run to. I had to fight this man.

            He came about three feet away from me. He swung his sword – it caught mt hand. I swung my sword. I missed I swung again and just caught his face, Then the swords clanged for about one minate. Then I fell to the ground. He swoped the sword round. I rolled, then he flung it. At me ? it landed about an inch away from my head. The I got up and plunged the sword in to his throught throat. He lay there. So I walked away.

A nice piece of writing

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